Tuesday, June 19, 2012

Tantalizing Tuesday Teaser #10


Welcome to Tanatlizing Tuesday, where we pick our own picture to write 200 words about. I hope you enjoy my 200 and be sure to check out all of the other teasers by following the links below.

The job should have been in and out.  Arrest the perps and go home to Trevor. Chelle loved working undercover, but today was different. Today she lost a friend and almost lost her life.
“Captain, I think I’m gonna head back to the station, unless you still need me here.”
“You should stick around a bit longer, you’re one of my best. After all, it was your bust.” The Captain held out his arm getting her moving back to the scene.
“Alright, I’ll stick around, but you owe me a jelly donut.”  She smiled at him and went to the crime scene. There were bodies strewn all across the yard. Most had guns by their sides. Others were just unlucky.
A chill slithered its way up her spine. Something was wrong about this scene. She tried to figure out what it was, when another gunman grabbed her and held her against him. She felt the cold of the gun barrel at her temple. She called out to the guys still there. “Shoot this sonofabitch!”
“Try anything and I’ll blow her fucking head off.” The perp pressed the gun harder into her temple.
“Calm down we can work this out.”
Pop!





11 comments:

  1. Wow, Bonnie! I loved it. The whole crime scene was well written and the excitement when she's grabbed. Damn, I wish I knew which gun made the POP!

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  2. Excellent. The description was perfect and the ending WOW

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  3. Loved this! You put me right in the scene. Felt her tiredness, saw the bodies. Tension and a cliff hanger... This has it all!

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  4. Oh Bonni fancy leaving us dangling like that. Excellent tease. I love it!

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  5. Awesome tease Bonni, now which gun went pop? I'd love to know :)

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  6. Oh, you sucked me in wonderfully. I'm eager for the next paragraph, the next page.

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  7. Wow, that was like something out of a TV show! lol Awesome stuff honey! I wish it read on. Fast paced - I loved it!

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  8. OMG what a fabulous teaser!! I loved the way you ended it. Always a joy to read your posts!

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  9. Fantastic TTT! I want more, I need to know what just happened.

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  10. Argh! What happened? Did he shoot her or was that pop something else? (a pop gun lol!) Great teaser Bonni!

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