Sunday, September 4, 2011

Six Sentence Sunday #8


This is a snippet from a new wip. Jack's Christmas Wish. Lissa and Derek are making love and she is comparing him to her last lover.

Damn, Derek was good. Unlike her previous lover, who treated her body like a remote control, pushing random buttons trying to get it right.

She often sang her own version of a children’s song in her head. The nipple bone is connected to the clit bone. The clit bone is connected to the orgasm. The man had serious problems with patience.
Posted by Bonni S. at 6:00 AM

19 comments:

  1. gemma parkesSeptember 4, 2011 at 7:10 AM

    Ha! Yeah, had a couple of those myself! great six!

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  2. Graylin FoxSeptember 4, 2011 at 9:08 AM

    LOL I love the song!

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  3. Lisa WorrallSeptember 4, 2011 at 9:48 AM

    *snort* fantastic!

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  4. LizSeptember 4, 2011 at 9:50 AM

    hilarious! well done.
    Liz

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  5. AnonymousSeptember 4, 2011 at 9:55 AM

    Funny! I love it!

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  6. An Open BookSeptember 4, 2011 at 9:58 AM

    Oh My- we've all had one of these- who treated her body like a remote control, pushing random buttons trying to get it right. - lol- great 6
    Dawne P

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  7. Muffy WilsonSeptember 4, 2011 at 10:07 AM

    I LOVED this snippet, Bonni!! And I adore the lilt the nursery song adds to the piece! Well done and a welcome chuckle:) Xo

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  8. AnonymousSeptember 4, 2011 at 10:47 AM

    LOL I love this snippet from the story! The whole story itself! Great six, Bonni! xo

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  9. S.LiraSeptember 4, 2011 at 10:57 AM

    Oh I love this line

    Unlike her previous lover, who treated her body like a remote control, pushing random buttons trying to get it right.

    Whew, love it great six!

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  10. Katie HarperSeptember 4, 2011 at 11:45 AM

    Brilliant!! Haven't we all had someone who treats us like a remote control with dead batteries.

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  11. UnknownSeptember 4, 2011 at 12:02 PM

    Amen! Have known many that couldn't work the damn remote myself. LOL. Very good six! Can't wait to see the rest.

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  12. Cara BristolSeptember 4, 2011 at 2:10 PM

    Funny. Love the analogy to the remote control.

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  13. Carrie Ann RyanSeptember 4, 2011 at 3:52 PM

    LMAO, and I am sure you can add a line about his bone as well LMAO

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  14. Denny S. BryceSeptember 4, 2011 at 5:24 PM

    Wondered over here and had to comment - That was FUNNY. Loved it!

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  15. Benjamin T. RussellSeptember 4, 2011 at 6:25 PM

    Ok, so I'm not getting why all the women commenters think this is so funny - everybody knows what happens when you put a remote control in a man's hands. She should have just sat on his face, that would have got his attention. Nicely done Ms. Bonni - you have obviously made a connection with your female fans.

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  16. Vivien DeanSeptember 4, 2011 at 6:35 PM

    Very cute! Thanks for sharing!

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  17. Taryn KincaidSeptember 4, 2011 at 7:07 PM

    It's cute and whimsical, but here's the thing: If Derek is so good, shouldn't she be thinking only abut him? And what he's making her feel? (Don't mind me, it's just a thought. I'm always out of step.)

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  18. AlixSeptember 5, 2011 at 5:36 AM

    Super fun six. Well done.

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  19. Pablo MichaelsSeptember 5, 2011 at 4:29 PM

    The song is memorable

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