Sunday, September 4, 2011

Six Sentence Sunday #8


This is a snippet from a new wip. Jack's Christmas Wish. Lissa and Derek are making love and she is comparing him to her last lover.

Damn, Derek was good. Unlike her previous lover, who treated her body like a remote control, pushing random buttons trying to get it right.

She often sang her own version of a children’s song in her head. The nipple bone is connected to the clit bone. The clit bone is connected to the orgasm. The man had serious problems with patience.

19 comments:

  1. Ha! Yeah, had a couple of those myself! great six!

    ReplyDelete
  2. Oh My- we've all had one of these- who treated her body like a remote control, pushing random buttons trying to get it right. - lol- great 6
    Dawne P

    ReplyDelete
  3. I LOVED this snippet, Bonni!! And I adore the lilt the nursery song adds to the piece! Well done and a welcome chuckle:) Xo

    ReplyDelete
  4. LOL I love this snippet from the story! The whole story itself! Great six, Bonni! xo

    ReplyDelete
  5. Oh I love this line

    Unlike her previous lover, who treated her body like a remote control, pushing random buttons trying to get it right.

    Whew, love it great six!

    ReplyDelete
  6. Brilliant!! Haven't we all had someone who treats us like a remote control with dead batteries.

    ReplyDelete
  7. Amen! Have known many that couldn't work the damn remote myself. LOL. Very good six! Can't wait to see the rest.

    ReplyDelete
  8. Funny. Love the analogy to the remote control.

    ReplyDelete
  9. LMAO, and I am sure you can add a line about his bone as well LMAO

    ReplyDelete
  10. Wondered over here and had to comment - That was FUNNY. Loved it!

    ReplyDelete
  11. Ok, so I'm not getting why all the women commenters think this is so funny - everybody knows what happens when you put a remote control in a man's hands. She should have just sat on his face, that would have got his attention. Nicely done Ms. Bonni - you have obviously made a connection with your female fans.

    ReplyDelete
  12. It's cute and whimsical, but here's the thing: If Derek is so good, shouldn't she be thinking only abut him? And what he's making her feel? (Don't mind me, it's just a thought. I'm always out of step.)

    ReplyDelete