Tuesday, May 22, 2012

Tantalyzing Tuesday Teaser #6

Welcome to Tanatlizing Tuesday, where we pick our own picture to write 200 words about. I hope you enjoy my 200 and be sure to check out all of the other teasers by following the links below.

The night was dark and the cave smelled dank from the rain. The storm raged on with the lightening snapping all around. You could feel the spark of electricity in the air, making your skin tingle. The crash of thunder one right after another sounded off in the background. But he didn’t seem to hear it. Uggy couldn’t seem to concentrate on anything but Lola.
Lola had gone to find food with a small party of hunters. She was a natural with the club, but he wished she hadn’t gone. She was probably out in the cold rain, squatting in the mud, when she should be in the cave pressed up against him.  He swore after tonight he would never let her go again. He held his knees to his chest and grabbed hold of his legs as he dropped his head. He couldn’t live without her. There wasn’t another woman in the whole clan that he could love.
A bright streak of lightening flashed and he saw her. They were working their way back to the cave. A bolt of lightning cracked through the sky, descending on the group. The last thing he saw was her on the ground.

Naomi Shaw: http://naomisfantasies.wordpress.com
Julez S Morbius: http://morbiussworld.blogspot.co.uk/
Lee Brazil: http://leebrazilauthor.blogspot.com
Sherry Palmer: http://michellechatton.blogspot.ca
Venus Cahill: http://venusbookluvr.blogspot.ca
Muffy WIlson: http://muffywilson.blogspot.com
Molly Synthia: http://mollysynthia.com
Don Abdul: http://don-abdul.blogspot.com/
Kharisma Rhayne: http://www.kharismarhayne.com/
Dianne Hartsock: http://diannehartsock.wordpress.com/tantalizing-tuesday-4/
ER Pierce: http://www.erpierce.com
Havan Fellows: http://havanshawthaven.blogspot.com/
Cyril J. Michael: http://authorcyriljmichaels.blogspot.ca/
Gemma Parkes: http://gemmaparkes.blogspot.com/
Cassandre Dayne: http://cassandredayne.wordpress.com/

Ray Sostre: http://theafterdarkworld.blogspot.com/
Benjamin Russell: http://incubuschronicles.blogspot.com/


  1. Brilliant piece. Is she okay or has he lost his one love?

  2. Hope this isn't a permanent loss! Nicely done!

  3. Great teaser. Chilling, yet exciting. I want to know more

  4. OMG - first I love Love LOVE your pic! Second...Bonni!!!! No!!! I felt his distress...great TT and great writing!

  5. Bonni, the Brilliant! It is always such a joy to read your work and this seems such a departure for you. I loved it. Uncanny how you can build up so much pressure and angst in 200 short words. Loved it:)xo

  6. No! Bonni send help! Pick her up someone! great post, very descriptive!

  7. Wow Bonni, this was a very creative piece. I had no idea where it was heading and the ending took me b surprise. The pain of actually seeing her and losing her in a flash of light must have been horrific. Great TTT

  8. Aw man, that is so gut clenching Bonni! I really hope that Lola survives and they can be together <3

  9. OMG! You made my heart stop and I NEED to know what happens next. You are such a tease!!
    Fantastic TTT.

  10. Okay...this IS a total tease!!! I want to read the rest, damn it, Bonni! I want to read more!

  11. Bonni, Fabulous Teaser! You left me hanging . . .

  12. Nicely done! You pulled me right into his world. I felt his worry and fear, his relief and joy when he saw her. The end is terrifying. Please say she's okay.

  13. Bonni you have not lost your muse or your gift for words. This is beautiful and I would love to know more. Did he lose her? Can he save her? I can feel his pain of seeing the one he loves hurt. Great job.

  14. How tragic. A brilliantly crafted teaser nonetheless.

  15. I love that picture. Just remarkable and the way you used the words around it. Whew. I think writing about loss is so personal and when you do it well the piece leaves you wanting more. Which I very much do.